Post by danielee on Jul 14, 2009 12:23:48 GMT -5
Hey everyone! I'm entering in the Furc Festival Character Background Story, and I want EVERYONE that visits this, to read it, and give me some opinions and how to add and improve. Don't be hestitant to make it really critical, and 'hurt my feelings'. You won't, I need all the opinions I can get. I want this to be good, so I can win something and donate it to FSF for future things. Thanks!
A first glance predicts great potential; with a unique display of coloration and a subtle yet oh so refined build. Tread now across the neglected bay coat, tangled ebony mane and sharp ribcage; hidden under a mask of rarity beholds a beauty in anything but the typical sense. Her markings are teeth, enveloping all things pure and whole. Her eyes like a magnet, dragging living souls into a golden-brown chasm of torment, malice and anguish. Scars, some pink and others faded, dwell across a once wholesome coat-- the most noticeable of all above her right eye. Sharp and craggy, it tapers into those merciless, sinister abysses, long past empathy and forgiveness.
This Akhal-Teke mare looked battered, in the least to say. Scars scattered across her body, like that of the stripes that draped across her back, and down to her sides to give her that rare, but beautiful brindle coloration. Born in the outskirts of even the country area, this mare was born into what seemed a good home, and dubbed Itztli. That is, until she was raised to fight against other mares, and even geldings, and stallions, thus in what resulted in the scars that covered her once beautiful coat.
Finally getting away from all the mess and the chaos of the fighting world, this mare found herself out in the wild. Not knowing how to survive, she found herself struggling to survive out in the real world. Though it was better than the life she was used to, she was trying to find her true meaning in life. The “Obsidian Knife” was on her way.
Thanks,
Winnie.
A first glance predicts great potential; with a unique display of coloration and a subtle yet oh so refined build. Tread now across the neglected bay coat, tangled ebony mane and sharp ribcage; hidden under a mask of rarity beholds a beauty in anything but the typical sense. Her markings are teeth, enveloping all things pure and whole. Her eyes like a magnet, dragging living souls into a golden-brown chasm of torment, malice and anguish. Scars, some pink and others faded, dwell across a once wholesome coat-- the most noticeable of all above her right eye. Sharp and craggy, it tapers into those merciless, sinister abysses, long past empathy and forgiveness.
This Akhal-Teke mare looked battered, in the least to say. Scars scattered across her body, like that of the stripes that draped across her back, and down to her sides to give her that rare, but beautiful brindle coloration. Born in the outskirts of even the country area, this mare was born into what seemed a good home, and dubbed Itztli. That is, until she was raised to fight against other mares, and even geldings, and stallions, thus in what resulted in the scars that covered her once beautiful coat.
Finally getting away from all the mess and the chaos of the fighting world, this mare found herself out in the wild. Not knowing how to survive, she found herself struggling to survive out in the real world. Though it was better than the life she was used to, she was trying to find her true meaning in life. The “Obsidian Knife” was on her way.
Thanks,
Winnie.